Th;log 9?

This week our group presentation were due. While I learned many things about sentences (my topic), I am not so sure I learned very much about anything else. I guess I was just too nervous with how I well of a job I will do with presenting my part of the PowerPoint. However hedged language may have stuck with me (haha). Basically what I learned about hedged language is that you want to use it whenever you don't want to sound arrogant/unprofessional about a certain topic. It entails making your claims less “harsh” by including words that give the chance for some Leeway in the discussion. For example, you might hear someone say, “Breaking bad is the best show ever!” However, if you want to correctly state your opinion, you should say, “ Breaking bad may be the best show ever!” I was actually curious whether or not this rule applied to every claim. Zack clarified that you use hedged language whenever you are talking in more of a soft science area (politics, psychology, the humanities), however you will state with one hundred percent certainty your claim in any hard science (calculus, biology, economics). Other presentations such as the apostrophes and semicolons were fun and interesting too, just for some reason the only presentation besides my own about complete and incomplete sentences was the hedged language one.

Song of the week: Not today!

Переводы

I learned that a lot of the things that I see today are translations. Basically everything that I’ve read is a translation of some kind. By taking information form one source and changing it to fit into another genre, you get a different delivery from the same information. This is kind of cool because it gives the opportunity for much more expanded thought. For instance, you can take a new technology you heard that they were working on in an article online and integrate it into your new sci-fi short story that you’ve been working on for the last 3 weeks. This is great in the sense that you can apply pretty much anything from any genre into something you can use for another purpose. Are last WP was completely focused on making translations from various sources, in our case it was a scholarly article. I translated my article into a children’s book and cooking recipe. This was rather easy because I knew the common moves and conventions of the genres I was translating to. Children’s books are always ‘dumbed down’ from the younger audience, but at the same time an important factor of the book’s is to keep the attention of the kids, so that was the hardest part. The recipe was basically using the same format with some obscure ingredients for the animals, so that was pretty easy to. The thing I used to connect these pieces were the topic of the scholarly article I choose, which was the diet of animals. Basically the most important thing I have learned from the past couple weeks is that conventions and moves of genre’s are like building blocks, and if you have the basic information, you can insert it into the frame, and you have yourself a new piece.

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Pb3a: Finding out what lions eat.

                Everyone likes cats, right? If not you probably like dogs. And if not them either, maybe some like ferret or something. The point is that all sane people like animals and enjoy some type of furry or scaly creature. I would like to make my Pb3a into a translation of the scholarly article about the diets of animals “Carbon isotopes ratios of bone apatite and animal diet reconstruction,” into a nice playful story book for children and an interesting recipe for some adult’s pets.

                 Kids grow up dreaming of playing with lions or dolphins or even elephants. Likewise many adults would love to have a pet lion too. I always just imagined me feeding my pet crocodile the leftover broccoli that I didn’t like under the table when my parents weren’t looking. Now that I’m older I think to myself, “What do crocodiles actually eat?” I’m 110% sure that many other kids have asked what certain animals eat, and many parents probably said the simple answer of meat or vegetables.  But with my interpretation of the scholarly article by Sullivan and Kruegar, I’d present their knowledge of animal diets into almost like an educational picture book. This would have like pop-outs and bright colors and short sentences that almost every single 4^th grader wants to read in his free time. The whole purpose of this would to educate the children about actual animals or plants their favorite animals eat. This could be accomplished with sentences like “Carl the crocodile crunched on his crisp tiny crustaceans,” or, “Larry the lion loves licking his fresh lamb.” Anything that uses simple rhetorical elements such as metaphors or alliteration because they attract the attention of new readers.

                 For adults I’d have to take another approach to the animal diet. When people think of their animals they think of how cuddly and fun they are to play with, and for an animal to be active, they must be fed well. I was thinking of making like an article from Pet smart or something that gives recipes for great meals for their fluffy cat or beautiful dog. Something I might write would be like, “Add two cubes of salmon meat for your little precious cat because it boosts flavor while adding the extra nutrition they need!” It can even go further and talk about how the proteins increase muscle mass or even give a nice sheen to the cat’s fur. This would aim for the adult audience, pretty much no discrimination in age because all ages have furry little creatures that they want to take care of to the best of their ability. The whole point would show the connection between the animal’s natural diet and what you can feed them to give them the best quality of life they can get—which is what every pet owner really wants.

To create an effective piece for a certain audience, you have to pay attention to what they want to hear. Kids aren’t going to want to hear how the color and thickness of your animal’s poop might allude to a sickness that they have. Similarly adults already know that lions eat meat and giraffes eat leaves.  So I plan to make a story book about what animals eat for the children and an a recipe for pet food for adults.

Thlogging

WP2 was due this week and I have never been so confused in my life. But at the same time I realized that I learned a lot about moves—yet again. This time however It was different. This time I finally understand how moves can impact the writing and emphasize their own unique style, which in this case is their discipline under which they study. In our projects we were tasked with comparing two different disciplines and a news source and discover the similarities and differences between them. I discovered that when you look very closely at two disciplines they differ in the fundamental way that they interpret their data. The reason this is important is because it relates to their style. And one’s style is solely based upon a collection of moves that they make commonly. In Cumming’s paper I commented on his analysis of his data and how it was tailored to his practiced discipline (following the regular conventions of the discipline wink-wink). Finally we saw how everything meshed together into one big new style of writing, the news source I identified. This news source borrowed conventions from the scholarly article from Cumming’s research while salting the potato with their own. This is what makes up news article’s genre. Even though they all cover the same topic, they all have different approaches and audience that ultimately affect their conventions, moves, and motives.

By the way, the song of the week will be known for centuries. 

Bob Ross' sick moves

So the moves that were contained in the videos were very soft voices—well except for family guy—and everyone was talking to you as if you were new and had no understanding about the topic. It is an instructional video so that actually makes a lot of sense. Something about Bob Ross’ videos that I noticed is his adjectives; I never knew that trees could be happy. But then again his happy little trees are his moves. With Walt Disney’s video expresses the individual styles of each painter on how their idea and interpretation of each of the subjects effects the resulting paintings. It’s almost like when you write about something, you include your own moves and interpretation that affects your analysis and portrayal of what you see.

Online class journal

One aspect of my paper that I feel as if I did well on this time was my organization, I struggled really hard last time with it because i wasn’t really sure where everything was supposed to go. I might still be rather off with my organization, but I feel better than last time.

The comments I received yesterday were rather critical, but I think they really helped me. Carly asked if I really thought my title is interesting--not sure if the title is that important-- but I felt like when i gave it a new title the attitude of the paper almost changed. Bernice also commented about my organization a couple times which helped remind me to really review my paper to see if even I feel like it’s worth turning in.

Thlog 5?

So I realize this is rather late and I am lucky to receive even half credit, better late than never I guess. Last week was a whole buffet of just different types of moves that authors use. We went through so many different examples and definitions of rhetorical terms such as parallelism and style. Parallelism has to basically with structure of the writing. It helps the passage to actually flow better when your points are not thrown around everywhere. Something about style that I found out tied in with last week’s emphasis was moves, they are what help define a person’s signature or style. Which is pretty much the whole emphasis for the past two weeks in class. One thing that I found interesting and actually entertaining while demonstrating the effectiveness of moves is the resume activity. For example we looked at Charlie Cheesecake’s resume and clearly saw the ineffectiveness of the moves he made, while Bradford’s was a knock out of the park resume. Different situations call for different moves, just as you don’t put someone’s arm in a sling because they have a headache. And you are not going to hear Kanye rapping about what he ordered for lunch at Subway, it just doesn’t flow. Moves defined this week too with almost secrecy; you could definitely tell at the “styles” we were working on were actually a series of moves that have been meshed together.

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Pb2B They Say, I Say

The book They Say, I Say it has a guide in the back to show you different templates for moves that most authors use in their writing. They give you twenty one different types of moves that an author can make—however that is not close at all to the actual numbers of moves authors have at their disposal. There is no limit to what, you, as a writer can make as a move. These moves are meant to impact the piece positively, which is why people use them so often in their own writing.

They Say, I Say is so accurate with the moves template that they use, you can see many of the moves used inside our course readings. In “Why blog? Searching for Writing on the Web” Alex Reid uses the template for Adding Metacommentary (A section in the guide about moves) when he says “In other words…” Carol uses moves from the template as well when she writes, “Now as you performed this kind of analysis, you likely didn’t walk through each of these questions one by one…” and continues on with her assumption. What move she uses comes from the “Introducing Something Implied or Assumed” section of the appendix guide. She also uses another move from the explaining quotes subsection when she starts to say, “Lloyd Bitzer argues…” Even Kerry Dirk uses the “Embedding voice markers” move when he says “I think it’s time…” in his article Navigating Genres along with using “Saying who is saying what” move when he states, “Taking what Devitt says into account…” The point I am trying to make here is that these moves are similar to conventions, they help build your argument and writing, however there is never a set combination or set of moves that you are required to use.

One of the moves I found was in Laura Bolin Carroll’s “Step toward Rhetorical Analysis”, in which she wrote, “The last piece of the rhetorical situation is the constraints.” The move made here is listing off her main points. Throughout the article she uses many transitional phrases that purposely make help better organize the essay. Without this, the article might seem messy and unorganized which would reduce the credibility of the article, so this move is an attempt at pathos.

In another section of her article, “Step toward Rhetorical Analysis,” she uses the phrase “Can’t judge a book by its cover,” this is her using a very common idiom to help the reader understand what she is talking about. She goes on to say that this inherently isn’t true because it’s a daily occurrence when people are faced with snap judgment. The impact of the move – using an idiom—is in the fact that people have undoubtedly heard this saying more than one hundred times throughout their life; so by saying a popular cliché it should not be taken as a fact that grabs the reader’s attention.

Alex Reid has a couple of interesting moves that he implements in his writing too; first off, he decides to use rhetorical questions. “What does this have to do with blogging?” Reid uses this question as a sort of pause in the reading to give the reader a moment to gather his or her thoughts. He starts off by giving myriad information about blogging and then after the introduction he gives this rhetorical question so to give the reader a moment to comprehend this said information. Then Reid continues to answer his own question. This helps the reader understand his assertion about why you should blog.

Lists are great way to present the information you want to give to the reader. Reid uses multiple lists throughout his article for this very reason—to present information to the audience. He lists off the top twenty five blogs as of June 2010 for the sole purpose of providing evidence to his claim, it strengthens it. It is very effective in the sense that the lists help you understand what he is trying to say. He even creates a table titled “Types of course-assigned blogs” where he lists different types of blogs in order to get even more of an idea as to what type of blog we are supposed to create.

Every author uses moves as part of their writing. It strengthens their essay by implementing techniques used by previous writers that are known to be an effective tool for their writing. They Say, I Say highlights this by actually creating a guide for you to look at common moves used in many writings, illustrating the almost formulaic tendency of praised pieces. 

Thlog of the week

Moves. Everything in the world is a “move” for something. If you look around a bar you’ll definitely she a couple guys trying to “make a move” on a girl, otherwise known as flirting or hitting her up. When someone makes a move it means they are trying to achieve something. When an author makes a move, it means he’s trying to affect his writing by implementing certain things into their writing that enhance and give purpose to their writing. Sometimes authors have their own move, their own signature that gives readers an alert that says loud and clear “this is mine!” Many people know this, but are used to seeing it in other things such as Picasso’s unique paint strokes or Zayn’s high pitched voice in one direction. Just like your signature on a legal document, these signatures let people know that this is something that is yours. Whether you know it or not, everything you read has some sort of move in it, such as a news article; they give you the facts while also posting their opinion to sort of persuade you. That is their move. When you listen to a protest they are trying to move you into supporting their beliefs.  So it was pretty neat to me to see how every author actually tries different tools/moves to achieve a goal an impact their writing. Something I am interested about is whether or not a famous celebrity accidentally made a “move” that made them famous, like maybe Michael Jackson was actually falling down but saved himself in time and just rolled with it calling it “the antigravity lean”.

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Scholarly articles might not be so helpful.

When you hear that something is scholarly you tend to assume that it’s researched and most of the time correct. I also tend to assume that whatever they are talking about is way out of my field of comprehension. Scholarly articles tend to be peer reviewed and made sure to be perfected long before they are ever published to make sure that they represent the correct traditions and customs of their respective discipline. You won’t find a “scholarly” article that pokes fun at Trump’s wig. They are always on topic and constructed with the utmost formalities.

In the scigen generator you can find samples of so called scholarly papers.  They used common phrases that appear quite frequently in other published scientific papers such as, “Many mathematicians would agree that,” or “Suppose that there exists cache coherence.” And people are sometimes fooled by this. The crazy thing about this generator is that publishers in real life have actually been fooled by this and have published “papers” even though the scientific paper they received was nothing but jargon they obviously didn’t understand. A scientific research paper is obviously a genre, and the makers of this website just used multiple conventions of the genre and meshed them together into what appears to be a research paper. They put enough fluff into the papers where people will just skim through it and accept it as fact, because they honestly have no idea what the ‘article’ is talking about. This is really important to note because the fact that it can be passed as a scholarly article shows that it has enough of the same conventions as the actual article that it passes for the real one.

 In the article “VISUAL DISORIENTATION WITH SPECIAL REFERENCE TO LESIONS OF THE RIGHT CEREBRAL HEMISPHERE.” The author is talking about something that he obviously knows a lot about. Or maybe he is spitting out random phrases like scigen. The point is that the actual article published by Oxford University and the text junk spewed out by the Article generator are indistinguishable for me as a reader. They use so much jargon that is inconceivable for me to even attempt to understand the title of the article, let alone what the body is trying to tell me. The only difference between the two publications that I can see is the layout. SciGen is laid out like a lab project while Oxford’s looks more like the page of a lengthy boring article. However they both do include pictures that show you want they are trying to tell you—so the use of visual images helps convey the message to the reader.

The absolutely most important piece of any scholarly article is the title. The title is the first thing you look at. When you are late night researching up topics to write about in the morning before your paper is due—like I am currently—you look for articles with titles that contain the key words you’re looking for. Thankfully Google quickens this process for us. You’re not going to pick an article titled “Young minds use interpersonal manipulation between allies to influence potential mates” for your research article about economic theory. The point I’m getting at is that with a scholarly article the title has to present itself to the world and basically tell it who its audience is meant to be.

Scholarly articles are the bane of anyone who isn’t interested in the topic. Oxford’s article gives most people shivers when they find out that it is the reading assignment. However so does a nonsense article form scigen. They both have similar conventions such as pictures and jargons; however they have contrasts such as structure and actual reality of the articles. 

WP1 was due this week.

WP1 was due this week and that was almost a disaster for me. At first I totally misunderstood the prompt and so I basically rewrote my whole essay. I guess it was indirectly a good thing because if I didn't find out I would have a much more worse paper than I submitted. From writing the paper I actually learned some things for myself there, especially about genre. I know my last thlog I said I learned about genre, but I swear I learned even more about it this week from frantically researching what to write about. What finally clicked with me is that genre is even broader than I thought before, practically everything you see is part of some genre. The blog you are reading this on is a genre; if you think about it hard enough, your clothing “style” is a genre-- granted it’s not literary-- but close enough. Most of our learning this week has been from our papers that we did.

All of my lessons this week were aimed at me becoming a better writer, which would be a miracle in itself. I realized that I need to use a lot more evidence in my papers to construct an actual defense of my argument, otherwise it wouldn't be much of an argument. The last thing I learned is that flow of writing comes with how comfortable with and how much you actually understand what you're talking about, so if you don’t know what you’re talking about, you’re going to have a really tough time trying to get your paper to flow well.

Oh if you're ever feeling down: Be yourself

Who cares about week 2?

So I found out that my writing 2 class in college is the class I have to write most in, but I guess that is to be expected. At least I learn when I am actually paying attention. We learned even more about genres and conventions. We read the article “So what? Who cares?” and I thought it was relatable, because as a college student I find myself asking “who cares?” probably way more than is healthy. It helped me to realize that I need to make it absolutely why you should care about my writing? AT the same I need to ask myself who cares about my writing, and hopefully that will give me a little something extra in my writing—a purpose.

               

  Writing is a way to convey your emotions to the world, and to do this you need to incorporate into your writing pathos, logos, and ethos. Pathos is an appeal to emotions it helps the readers to visual vivid fighting scenes and magical settings in medieval Europe. Logos is a more logical attempt to appeal to readers, usually by using tools such as metaphors or analogies. Finally ethos is basically when you give reliability to your argument, such as citing your sources or just being straight confident when you give your reasons.

I honestly believe I learned so much this week that I’m surprised I wasn’t overwhelmed.

Song of the week:House of Gold

Pb1B: Genre Generators

I visited four different online generators to find out more about how conventions and genres work. It gave me a better understanding of what exactly a genre is by demonstrating that when a couple conventions are meshed together, they create a recognizable genre. The way these sites work is that the creator of the site first creates a template while leaving in some empty places that are like missing puzzle pieces. These puzzle pieces are the conventions. The reason why these sites are such great examples of conventions is because they actually show you a randomly made story, research paper, or writing prompt all just by plugging in words from a set of words or phrases that have already been defined as conventions themselves.

For example on my first generator (pdos.csail.mit.edu/scigen) it gave me a whole research paper that looked rather legitimate. They used common phrases that appear quite frequently in other published scientific papers such as, “Many mathematicians would agree that,” or “Suppose that there exists cache coherence.” The crazy thing about this generator is that publishers in real life have actually been fooled by this and have published “papers” even though the scientific paper they received was nothing but jargon they obviously didn’t understand. A scientific research paper is obviously a genre, and the makers of this website just used multiple conventions of the genre and meshed them together into what appears to be a research paper.

Another site called http://pandyland.net/random/ chooses from its database three different images, and places them into random order, creating a comic strip. The site advertises over 74,000 combinations, meaning that they have around 75 different panels and then choose three in any random order. The comics work because they give crude humor that usually have an awkward comment, crude humor, or something rather violent which people all find funny sometimes. Each of the panels follows some sort of convention of the genre, that’s the only reason why you’re certain to find a comic that makes sense eventually.

Memes have become immensely popular, and it’s very easy to tell when a meme is used correctly or not. Bad-luck Brian is classic for having the worst possible outcomes. The first world problems meme allows people to complain while at the same time acknowledging that it could always be worse. The Scumbag Steve meme is used when you want people to know how bad of a person your roommate is. Each different meme has its own genre, and its own conventions. If you ever decide pick a meme and use it incorrectly and post it on a website like 9gag.com or reddit.com you’ll certainly get backlash from the community because it’s expected that you know which memes to use for which situations. So basically, when you use a meme you’re telling the viewer what to expect, but if you use the wrong conventions, people won’t like the meme.

Many people who want to become writers will experience writer’s block a couple times in their career, and need either motivation or a new and unique idea. My last example is a writing prompt generator I found off the internet, it is a site called seventhsanctum.com/generate and all you do is ask the generator for a prompt and it spits one right up. Some examples of the prompts it gives are “A fusion of the legend of Theseus and the Minotaur and the legend of Orion” and "A fusion of the story of Hamlet and the tale of the Good Samaritan that concerns a group of band members." The prompts that created are entirely just a random person involved with another random event. Writing prompts are a genre on their own, they are all created to give inspiration to a writer that is fizzled out of ideas, and this generator does purely that. Just like every other generator this one gives results because it uses common conventions of the writing prompts and mashes them up hoping that they will inspire young authors.

Anyone who needs to understand what a genre is and how conventions are the building blocks of genres needs to visit any of these website generators. These websites were amazing in the sense that they can give you actual example of how conventions and genres work.

Generator websites: pdos.csail.mit.edu/scigen, pandyland.net/random, memegenerator.net, seventhsanctum.com/generate

Buzzfeed's genre

Buzzfeed is a website that is notorious for hooking in internet viewers with taglines such as “26 things you won’t believe we found on other websites!”, or “Do you know how to make this vodka watermelon?”.

They use this convention because they know it works. They know that people will scan this headline with a quick glance while browsing their Facebook newsfeed and think to themselves ‘Why yes! I do want to know how get drunk from a watermelon!’ The people at Buzzfeed aim to grab the attention of the bored reader. The normal conventions of a Buzzfeed article include a short, attention grabbing headline, a list of things that apply to the headlines, or a quick quiz that tells you what Disney princess your husband is.

The main audience of a Buzzfeed article are bored teenagers and young adults that are just sitting at home, or waiting for the teacher to dismiss them, or just taking a break from working. You’ll see people busy on their smartphones swiping down the Buzzfeed page just trying to find an article or quiz or even a list that can distract them from their boring day. Because of this they produce articles that sufficiently waste enough time for them to cure their boredom for the few minutes that they have.

The purpose of these articles is to give the young adult mind enough stimulation that it keeps drawing them back for more each time they are bored. Curiosity killed the cat and the writers at Buzzfeed utilize this by drawing in our attention by interesting titles and quizzes. Quizzes give the readers a kind of pleasure from knowing that they were already ‘correct’ about what cereal flavor fits them best for their personality.

Articles on Buzzfeed usually contain funny videos and quizzes that peak the interest of readers. Some examples of these quizzes include “What Nintendo 64 game are you?” and “What Game of Thrones character are you?” I believe that the reason people are so interested in these quizzes is partly because of their boredom and partly because of they think it would be funny to see what the answer is for them, out of novelty. I remember when there was a quiz which Full-Metal Alchemist character I was and I got the main character, so being the fifteen year old I was, I rubbed it in the face of my best friend since she like that show.

Finally, the usual tone of a Buzzfeed article is a happy-go-lucky tone that tries to be as cheerful as possible. I think they do this on purpose because people are usually more receptive of a tone that is friendly and accepting over a tone that is condensending and critical of things that people have very different views on such as politics. This is what makes Buzzfeed different than other news and social media sites; it sometimes lets its readers to be exposed to what is happening in the world, while still giving a tone that can be seen as constructive.  They give a sense of humor while being serious when they need to be.

Buzzfeed articles have become a genre of their own, with their cliché titles and their just ridiculously named quizzes. They might sometimes be annoyingly abundant, but people do enjoy them when they have nothing to do.

First week of Writing 2

My first week of Writing2 was filled with a lot of information.

I learned about a couple different things about writing. I learned about the different levels of writing, such as first order and second order. I also learned about genres and the general conventions of certain writings. To explain a little bit more about the different orders of writing, I'll give some examples of first order and second order. First order writing is the creative and stream of thought subjects, such as when you forget to write that speech you were supposed to give in front of the whole class, and have to do it all ad lib. However second order writing is a lot more refined and relevant to the subject, which happens when you actually complete a rough draft to your speech and revise it multiple times before standing up behind the lectern. Genres are kind of like different species of writing; sometimes they share similar key body parts (conventions) like how cats and monkeys both have legs, however have unique elements like the monkey have thumbs. To give a more literal example, country music and country pop music both have very similar conventions, such as their country twang, however they are different genres because of the speed and tempo of the songs. Country music vs country pop.

That is basically everything I learned this week.

About me

I don't really know exactly what to write about, so I will just introduce myself I guess. My name is Jonathan James Taylor Bruning. I was born and raised in Redlands, California which is a rather amazing city in the Inland Empire. Since I didn't really have much friends when I was younger I entertained myself by challenging myself to climb pretty much anywhere I could, which naturally resulted in many, many injuries. I never really got over the challenge of climbing on anything I can and so when I first came to UCSB I promised myself that before I graduate from here I will climb to the top of Storke Tower. It's going to happen one day.

I am also very excited for all the new opportunities that I have here at UCSB. What I really want to do is to go on one of the volunteering abroad trips. Thailand would be the place I sign up for first. It would be a very eye-opening experience for me, since I'll be able to somewhat experience what people in other countries have to deal with daily. Going to Thailand would also let me give back to the world, it would be unforgettable. So that's going to happen, I promise.

Oh, and if you haven't heard this song yet, you should listen to this.